http://www.thehaikufoundation.org/2009/09/21/viral-2-4/ Mon, 06 Feb 2012 14:47:07 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3 http://www.thehaikufoundation.org/2009/09/21/viral-2-4/comment-page-1/#comment-1793 Garry Eaton Thu, 21 Jan 2010 21:50:54 +0000 http://thehaikufoundation.org/?p=4187#comment-1793 The image this evokes of two snails slugging it out a la Corbett vs Johnson is just too ludicrous for me to get around. Sorry! The image this evokes of two snails slugging it out a la Corbett vs Johnson is just too ludicrous for me to get around. Sorry!

]]> http://www.thehaikufoundation.org/2009/09/21/viral-2-4/comment-page-1/#comment-984 Merrill Ann Gonzales Tue, 22 Sep 2009 22:37:02 +0000 http://thehaikufoundation.org/?p=4187#comment-984 Yes, I agree it is quite an enjoyable poem...and quite elegant too....the image of the moonlight on the snails bodies seems quiet unexpectedly lovely. Makes me think what other lovely is waiting for me to but see! Many thanks, Merrill Yes, I agree it is quite an enjoyable poem…and quite elegant too….the image of the moonlight on the snails bodies seems quiet unexpectedly lovely. Makes me think what other lovely is waiting for me to but see! Many thanks, Merrill

]]> http://www.thehaikufoundation.org/2009/09/21/viral-2-4/comment-page-1/#comment-982 Paul Miller Tue, 22 Sep 2009 16:51:47 +0000 http://thehaikufoundation.org/?p=4187#comment-982 A very enjoyable poem, and nicely manipulative. Perhaps what Jane Reichhold calls a question/answer poem. I don’t think there are any people here, that the only young bodies (the phrase ‘young’ makes me agree with Kevin about the POV) are the snails. And I think Kevin hits this poem smack on when he says it “alerts me to the fact that my perception of nature has not been as sensual, nor as full of imaginative understanding…” I say ‘manipulative’ because I can’t think of any way to experience this moment solely as presented. The snails are seen first, then their sensualness noticed and the classical metaphor thought of (moonlit is a great choice), then the poem ‘crafted’ for effect. I say ‘nicely manipulative’ because a poem like this shows just how varied the short poem can be. A wonderful choice! A very enjoyable poem, and nicely manipulative. Perhaps what Jane Reichhold calls a question/answer poem. I don’t think there are any people here, that the only young bodies (the phrase ‘young’ makes me agree with Kevin about the POV) are the snails. And I think Kevin hits this poem smack on when he says it “alerts me to the fact that my perception of nature has not been as sensual, nor as full of imaginative understanding…” I say ‘manipulative’ because I can’t think of any way to experience this moment solely as presented. The snails are seen first, then their sensualness noticed and the classical metaphor thought of (moonlit is a great choice), then the poem ‘crafted’ for effect. I say ‘nicely manipulative’ because a poem like this shows just how varied the short poem can be. A wonderful choice!

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