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New to Haiku: Free Discussion Area / Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« on: September 09, 2012, 02:34:11 PM »
wolf whistle
the fox on the corner
turns to look
Andy
looking back at me
the accusing eye
of the shot deer
Adelaide
deer tracks
under the window...
I sign the prenup
Vida
prenup –
the hummingbird guards
her nest
Don
nest in a pine tree
abandoned half-way complete--
so many promises
Adelaide
the fox on the corner
turns to look
Andy
looking back at me
the accusing eye
of the shot deer
Adelaide
deer tracks
under the window...
I sign the prenup
Vida
prenup –
the hummingbird guards
her nest
Don
nest in a pine tree
abandoned half-way complete--
so many promises
Adelaide
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New to Haiku: Free Discussion Area / Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« on: August 30, 2012, 06:52:01 AM »
Vida
wine and roses -
this blood-moon awaits
the wolf
Don
wolf whistle
the fox on the corner
turns to look
Andy
looking back at me
the accusing eye
of the shot deer
Adelaide
wine and roses -
this blood-moon awaits
the wolf
Don
wolf whistle
the fox on the corner
turns to look
Andy
looking back at me
the accusing eye
of the shot deer
Adelaide
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New to Haiku: Free Discussion Area / Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« on: August 19, 2012, 05:55:58 PM »
falling in love
the twists and turns
of autumn leaves
Adelaide
leaves
will return in spring
our cat is gone forever
Nu Quang
forever
the time between this second
and the next
Andy
next time –
i’m glad there
is one
lulu
one dozen roses
placed before his photo-
12 years alone
Adelaide
the twists and turns
of autumn leaves
Adelaide
leaves
will return in spring
our cat is gone forever
Nu Quang
forever
the time between this second
and the next
Andy
next time –
i’m glad there
is one
lulu
one dozen roses
placed before his photo-
12 years alone
Adelaide
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New to Haiku: Free Discussion Area / Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« on: July 25, 2012, 08:10:57 PM »
Thank, Alan, for your quick reply.
Adelaide
Adelaide
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New to Haiku: Free Discussion Area / Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« on: July 25, 2012, 04:19:05 PM »
I have a question regarding haiku posted on this train. Are they considered published?
Adelaide
Adelaide
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New to Haiku: Free Discussion Area / Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« on: July 25, 2012, 11:50:47 AM »
day
lingers into the night -
red glow in the moon
Snow Leopard
moon landing
she takes the first step
and calls home
Adelaide
home
inaccessible in Cholon . . .
I need a spaceship
Nu Quang
___________________________
spaceship blues . . .
the rising sun
is falling
Don
falling in love
the twists and turns
of autumn leaves
Adelaide
lingers into the night -
red glow in the moon
Snow Leopard
moon landing
she takes the first step
and calls home
Adelaide
home
inaccessible in Cholon . . .
I need a spaceship
Nu Quang
___________________________
spaceship blues . . .
the rising sun
is falling
Don
falling in love
the twists and turns
of autumn leaves
Adelaide
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New to Haiku: Free Discussion Area / Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« on: June 30, 2012, 07:53:05 AM »
wind blown hair
my favorite photo
of her and her horse
marty
horses exercise
round and round the paddock-
neither first nor last
Adelaide
last minute deals...
I buy a ticket
for Ascension Day
Vida
day
lingers into the night -
red glow in the moon
Snow Leopard
moon landing
she takes the first step
and calls home
Adelaide
my favorite photo
of her and her horse
marty
horses exercise
round and round the paddock-
neither first nor last
Adelaide
last minute deals...
I buy a ticket
for Ascension Day
Vida
day
lingers into the night -
red glow in the moon
Snow Leopard
moon landing
she takes the first step
and calls home
Adelaide
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New to Haiku: Free Discussion Area / Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« on: April 01, 2012, 05:06:56 PM »
hold of the ship
full of elephant tusks
Ivory coast
marty
roller coaster
the screeching voice
of an icy wind
Adelaide
wind blown hair
my favorite photo
of her and her horse
marty
horses exercise
round and round the paddock-
neither first nor last
Adelaide
full of elephant tusks
Ivory coast
marty
roller coaster
the screeching voice
of an icy wind
Adelaide
wind blown hair
my favorite photo
of her and her horse
marty
horses exercise
round and round the paddock-
neither first nor last
Adelaide
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New to Haiku: Free Discussion Area / Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« on: March 06, 2012, 06:33:28 PM »
devotion
the carpenter's calluses
at confession
Alan
confession moon—
how many secrets
does a seashell hold?
John
hold of the ship
full of elephant tusks
Ivory coast
marty
roller coaster
the screeching voice
of an icy wind
Adelaide
the carpenter's calluses
at confession
Alan
confession moon—
how many secrets
does a seashell hold?
John
hold of the ship
full of elephant tusks
Ivory coast
marty
roller coaster
the screeching voice
of an icy wind
Adelaide
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New to Haiku: Free Discussion Area / Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« on: March 02, 2012, 08:58:41 PM »
domination over
the priest removes
his dog collar
John McManus
collar -
the spring fever
of lipstick
Don
lipstick
at the murder scene
plum blossom
Sue
plum blossoms
the soft fragrance
of his aftershave
Adelaide
the priest removes
his dog collar
John McManus
collar -
the spring fever
of lipstick
Don
lipstick
at the murder scene
plum blossom
Sue
plum blossoms
the soft fragrance
of his aftershave
Adelaide
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New to Haiku: Free Discussion Area / Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« on: March 01, 2012, 07:07:19 PM »
Looks like the haiku train is stalled. Anyone out there ready to start it up again?
Adelaide
Adelaide
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New to Haiku: Free Discussion Area / Re: showing action: when to use -ing
« on: February 23, 2012, 07:55:15 AM »
Hi Matthew,
John's advice just goes to show that what seems to work for the poet is the right way to go. Good luck as you go winging your way through haiku.
Adelaide
John's advice just goes to show that what seems to work for the poet is the right way to go. Good luck as you go winging your way through haiku.
Adelaide
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New to Haiku: Free Discussion Area / Re: showing action: when to use -ing
« on: February 19, 2012, 09:45:15 AM »
Hi Matthew,
Alan has given you (and the rest of us) great examples of successfully using ing. I would add a word of caution: only one ing in a haiku. More than one tends to call attention to them.
In Alan's haiku below: L3 could have been faces turning up, but Alan wisely chose upturned faces
woodsmoke rising
towards the milky way
upturned faces
or in this one
foot-stamping weather
the train passenger breaks
in a new book
L2 could have been the train passenger breaking
My advice: Don't shy away from using the particple; just be careful not to overdo it.
Adelaide
Alan has given you (and the rest of us) great examples of successfully using ing. I would add a word of caution: only one ing in a haiku. More than one tends to call attention to them.
In Alan's haiku below: L3 could have been faces turning up, but Alan wisely chose upturned faces
woodsmoke rising
towards the milky way
upturned faces
or in this one
foot-stamping weather
the train passenger breaks
in a new book
L2 could have been the train passenger breaking
My advice: Don't shy away from using the particple; just be careful not to overdo it.
Adelaide
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New to Haiku: Free Discussion Area / Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« on: February 02, 2012, 04:17:52 PM »
toe testing
his sudden look and sly smile
says yes
daysleeper
From what I've read on another post, it seems that some data has been deleted. so I'll post my link to the train again.
yesterday's storm
all that seemed permanent
toppled
Adelaide
his sudden look and sly smile
says yes
daysleeper
From what I've read on another post, it seems that some data has been deleted. so I'll post my link to the train again.
yesterday's storm
all that seemed permanent
toppled
Adelaide
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Sea Shell Game / Re: Sea Shell Game 4
« on: February 01, 2012, 08:44:50 PM »
Paul's haiku could be a dream or a nightmare. I get nothing else from it. Perhaps more of a dream because the beetles are gold, like jewels rather than scary bugs.
From Fay's I'm reminded of the paper masks we made as children using grocery bags. Being paper they didn't last long. They were a temporary plaything, temporary as our life is temporary. We see life through our eyes and it is slowly closing, like the gate, a little more each day.
I prefer Fay's haiku.
Adelaide
From Fay's I'm reminded of the paper masks we made as children using grocery bags. Being paper they didn't last long. They were a temporary plaything, temporary as our life is temporary. We see life through our eyes and it is slowly closing, like the gate, a little more each day.
I prefer Fay's haiku.
Adelaide
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