Here are some of my quotes from exercises I've designed for students, which may help address your query about authorial comment:Rebecca:"I have twice gotten the criticism that my poems are guilty of authorial comment. Could you describe this and give an example or two to help further clarify this for me."How to let the reader be in haiku
Suggestions lie in the text but are deliberately not spelt out to us as we are proficient and able enough to work something out for ourselves. We all have to do these actions throughout our lives.
Avoid authorial direction, as haiku are not the single voice of the writer, but of the reader also.
There is enough to get our imagination and emotions activated... [and] it is left to the reader to complete the story as a co-author, as a partner of equal standing to the writer.
If the whole story is revealed and dictated to the reader, what is left is that we as readers are just merely bystanders, and not participants.
On one level there may be a beginning, middle and end, but that end is ‘open’ so we can make our own conclusions, our own signature on it as a reader/co-author.
The trick with haiku is to turn the story into poem, and not any poem, but one that avoids dictating a definitive narrative onto the reader, leaving nothing else for them but to set aside their own interpretations, and obsequiously take a narrow route that the writer insists on for the reader.
We are not reading/telling/writing a story or tale for a child who is in their early development, where they require a logical narrative progression: We want to to trick the brain into learning and discovering new ways to grow and react.How to let the reader be in haiku©Alan Summers 2012
Hi everyone, I'm a newbie who has been writing some form of haiku for many years, but only in the last year and a half have I attempted to follow the experts advice. I have a few questions about glossary terms. First, I've been prounouncing senryu as send-you or sen-rey you. Is this correct? As I've worked in the advanced mentoring section, I have twice gotten the criticism that my poems are guilty of authorial comment. Could you describe this and give an example or two to help further clarify this for me. Another commentor said the ku in my poem showed closeness. I think I understand what she meant, but I've read four how-to books about haiku that never mentioned this. Maybe a glossary definition would help others. Thanks for your time. Rebecca DrouilhetAlan's EDIT REASON:
Additional line from comments made by me in my haiku workshops.