Welcome to re:Virals, The Haiku Foundation’s weekly poem commentary feature on some of the finest haiku ever written in English. This week’s poem was
only a drawing of a labyrinth, only the moon’s pull –Mark Harris, Noon 8 (January 2014)
For Radhamani Sarma, the artist enters and exits from deep attraction:
The first two lines — “only a drawing /of a labyrinth” — emphatically abound with so much compressed meaning. Possibly, the artist, painter, or a creative writer draws or sketches or visualizes a labyrinth, implying many designs and layouts.
The second and third lines — “only/ the moon’s pull” — takes us to another aspect: A visual image of the moon’s attraction. In the artist’s view, after the final round, going deeper into the labyrinth, there is a lady love or lover shining cool on the surroundings. The image of the moon with its pull is the attraction impacting the speaker.
It could also mean that by the time artist has completed his sketch, his involvement is so deep and undistributed, that it is like a cool night with a cool moon and awaited by the lady love.
As this week’s winner, Radhamani gets to choose next week’s poem, which you’ll find below. We invite you to write a commentary to it. It may be as long or short, academic or spontaneous, serious or silly, public or personal as you like. We will select out-takes from the best of these. And the very best will be reproduced in its entirety and take its place as part of the THF Archives. Best of all, the winning commentator gets to choose the next poem for commentary.
Anyone can participate. A new poem will appear each Friday morning. Simply put your commentary in the Contact box by the following Tuesday midnight (Eastern US Time Zone). Please use the subject header “re:Virals” so we know what we’re looking at. We look forward to seeing some of your favorite poems — and finding out why!
a blade of grass between my fingers father’s whistle – Rachel Sutcliffe, Human/Kind Journal, Issue 1.2 (February 2019)