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Re: One line haiku
« Reply #15 on: May 21, 2014, 11:03:46 AM »
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Thanks PaulB!  8)

"Originally composed as a one-line and due to be accepted at a highly-respected haiku site:

snowing through the blizzard particles of me


Anthologised: The Humours of Haiku (Iron Press 2012)"

I really like this one, Alan!

It's since appeared in various publications:

snowing
through the blizzard
particles of me


Alan Summers
Publications credits:  The Haiku Calendar 2012 (Snapshot Press); The Humours of Haiku (Iron Press 2012); The In-Between Season (With Words Haiku Pamphlet Series 2012); Cornell University, Mann Library (March 2013); Per Diem Archive: D. Wentworth April 2014, "Transcendence" http://www.thehaikufoundation.org/per-diem-archive-details/?IDcat=288

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Award credits:
Winner, The Haiku Calendar Competition 2011 (Snapshot Press)

And finally in its original intention as a one-line haiku:

Cornell University weblink:
https://tinyurl.com/particlesofme


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Re: One line haiku
« Reply #16 on: May 21, 2014, 11:21:42 AM »
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A lot has been said, and will continue to be said about one line haiku.

Here are some things that I have said, and I hope others step in with thoughts, techniques, devices, and examples.


One of many devices I employ is the abrupt method: It's a deliberate subvert technique, as I’ve keenly noticed that both syntax and semantics can be utlised in a manner not possible or accepted in normal modes of writing.

It’s also been said that if it's a one-line haiku you are aiming for, that they work best when they cannot be remade into three line haiku.  I’m not sure that’s always the case, but it’s a useful guideline to go by, or work around.

I'd suggest introducing "abruptions" as one method which is my term for breaking up normal syntax/semantics.

Abruptive techniques is my term for sharp changes in directing the reader, and I often subvert the adjective 'abruptive' into a noun i.e. look for abruptives in your haiku.

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Abruptive: suddenly disruptive
Urban Dictionary
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merriam-webster.com:
abruptive (adjective) : showing a tendency to be abrupt

abruptitude (noun) : the quality of extreme suddenness
Ryan Muller
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Embrace the abruptitude!

Sometimes one-line haiku are, or appear to be, a little subversive in order to tell a greater truth.

If it's too smooth it could be just a line of poetry, or a statement.
Alan Summers


Jim Kacian says this:

"Multiple stops yield subtle, rich, often ambiguous texts which generate alternative readings, and subsequent variable meanings.

Each poem can be several poems, and the more the different readings cohere and reinforce each other, the larger the field occupied by the poem, the greater its weight in the mind."

The Way of One by Jim Kacian
Roadrunner X:2



More will be forthcoming in my book-in-progress.

For now, here are some of my own haiku.


ground zero into the new friend's story

Publications credits:  Roadunner Masks 4; in fear of dancing: The Red Moon Anthology of English-Language Haiku 2013 ISBN: 978-1-946848-24-9 www.redmoonpress.com/catalog/product_info.php?products_id=182


the blue note I turn to wind-spun snow

Publication Credits: 
Blithe Spirit 23.4 (November 2013): The Haiku Calendar 2015 (Snapshot Press, 2014)

Award Credit: Runner-up, The Haiku Calendar Competition 2014



all those red apples amongst the blue tit

Publications credits:
Does Fish-God Know (Yet To Be Named Free Press 2012); roadrunner MASKS 4




snowing through the blizzard particles of me


Publications credits: 
The Haiku Calendar 2012 (Snapshot Press); The Humours of Haiku (Iron Press 2012); The In-Between Season (With Words Haiku Pamphlet Series 2012); Mann Library (as originally written as a one line haiku, March 2013)

Award credits:
Winner, The Haiku Calendar Competition 2011 (Snapshot Press)




chestnut moon shifting in my memory ghost floors

Publication Credits: Roadrunner 12.3 (December 2012)




sick train the night heron shifts silt for all of us

Publications credits:
a handful of stones (2nd March 2011); A Blackbird Sings, a small stone anthology ISBN 978-0-9571584-2-9 ed.  Fiona Robyn & Kaspalita Thompson (Woodsmoke Press 2012)




long grass nights star systems in the Big Dipper

Publications credits: Haiku News (2012)



this small ache and all the rain too robinsong

Publications credits: Modern Haiku vol. 44.1 winter/spring 2013




giallo this restricted area my birthplace

Publications credits:
bones journal Pre issue - Single haiku & Sequences (2012); Does Fish-God Know (Yet To Be Named Free Press 2012)



Hirst's butterflies disturbing the exhibits people

Publication Credits: Roadrunner 12.3 (December 2012)


sloe-eyed horses in Lichtenstein bubble gum wrappers

Publication Credits: Roadrunner 12.3 MASKS 4



long hard rain my compass your true north

Publications credits: Frogpond 36.1 • 2013



rain on the river the jesus star shifting

Publications credits: Janice M Bostok Haiku Prize 2012 Anthology Evening Breeze




pull of stars turning cold the snail's navigation

Publications credits:
Does Fish-God Know (YTBN Press 2012); Blithe Spirit (February 2013)




night-entangled moons treading judas floors

Publication Credits:
Dark Pens, a journal of moon haiku (1.1. 2013)



Red Sea beat my heart still hydrozoa

Publication Credits: Does Fish-God Know (Yet To Be Named Free Press 2012)



voodoo rain this new light year

Publication Credits: Does Fish-God Know (Yet To Be Named Free Press 2012)



tearing up snow falls slowly a kind of blue

Publication Credit:  Bones - a journal for contemporary haiku No. 3 (December 15, 2013)


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Re: One line haiku
« Reply #17 on: May 22, 2014, 05:51:53 PM »
Hi, Bea  Your question is interesting to me, because I don't always know when to use one-liners

Here are a couple I've written and had published:

Mardi Gras masks the strangers in the crowd

 Publication credits:  Modern Haiku I think the Winter/Spring issue of 2013

and

unraveling one mystery I find another misty moon

Publication credits:  Lakeview International Journal of Literature and Art, August 2013, issue #2.

                             




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Re: One line haiku
« Reply #18 on: October 27, 2014, 02:43:41 PM »
the warning suggest i start a new topic.

anyway,
this is marty.
i have not visited the forum several months, likely 'cause of low energy.  this site requires some concentration to participate , and i am not always able.

i see many mentors here and some wonderful examples.

still i wonder ?   are the requirements named?

all suggestions seem to favor a break in the subject or view.  is length limited to x number of sounds or words?

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Re: One line haiku
« Reply #19 on: October 27, 2014, 03:08:10 PM »
Hi Marty,
the warning suggest i start a new topic.

anyway,
this is marty.
i have not visited the forum several months, likely 'cause of low energy.  this site requires some concentration to participate , and i am not always able.

i see many mentors here and some wonderful examples.

still i wonder ?   are the requirements named?

all suggestions seem to favor a break in the subject or view.  is length limited to x number of sounds or words?

Welcome back! :)

I think it's just that you haven't been here a while that it seems like you need to really concentrate, but take your time, there's no rush, hurry, or race. :)

The requirements are not that different from three line haiku or any kind of poetry to be honest.  There has to be tension, resonance, pace, rhythm, and content.

I am working on a piece about one-line haiku which will appear in my new book Writing Poetry: the haiku way.

Haiku tend to have as their main feature a cut, break, as they are two part poems.

You asked "is length limited to x number of sounds or words?"

You could certainly approach haiku (whatever number of lines) with a set number of sounds like 3-5-3 English-language syllabic sounds or morae as syllables are so uneven in sound length.

I'll give some more examples, and just take your time as they are different at first readings.  But as a line of poetry but being one-line haiku at the same there has to be tension, and various perhaps unique devices to make it a place apart from other lines of poetry and three line haiku.


examples of one line haiku by Alan Summers and various authors

Published one-line haiku by Alan Summers

   after rain midnight dreams a hedgehog

   Gare du Nord shifting art deco snow

   this small ache and all the rain too robinsong

   ants following invisible trials the children

blues change the colour rain

all thumbs into the matrix rain starlings

mist and dark I hold onto Little Bear

city of glass the immobilised man small stone counting

long hard rain my compass your true north

lantana the dark-veined tiger nectar-laden

pull of stars turning cold the snail's navigation

all those red apples amongst the blue tit

giallo this restricted area my birthplace

h=k=l=0 each love number sleeps

Hirst's butterflies disturbing the exhibits people

chestnut moon shifting in my memory ghost floors

night-entangled moons treading judas floors

train sitting:facingpeoplei’drathernot   

our pigsilk insults pre-coital manoeuvres playback

the camp fire burns the misty moon halved by thin cloud

nautiluses who remember useful things for only a day

my failed assassin, who has never killed

Seven Sisters the call of owls either side

recurringdream#16.333iso/overbreakfast

Your oily gold in red saffron tea makes me laugh

petrichor this green sunsets in yesterday

curse her Rain falls from a normal blue sky

just me Great Auk I died

Monday’s magician of yellow colour of murder

this sorrowing heart fading into plum blossom

crowded train a dozen yellows crackle

macula lutea the snowballs inside dogs

kwĭkˈsĭlˌvər: I've a need for the next biblical cubit

voodoo rain this new light year

Red Sea beat my heart still hydrozoa

Cheshire Moon the cat grins in Farsi

eight thousand li of cloud and moon questions mark

Oak Moon the carpenter's calluses chafing

butterfly dreaming man the Black Butterfly Moon

window-rattling moon I stay up and turn blue

Black Moon my finders keepers Valentine

toys from a distant land scaffolding the fall

ground zero into the new friend's story

sloe-eyed horses in Lichtenstein bubble gum wrappers

messenger shooting crows


soul her fish fingers to the second knuckle

long grass nights star systems in the Big Dipper

corn chaff realising oil as one colour

field of dreams an unborn child's color isn't rapeseed

Pharmakós the name you scratch inside

Blue Moon we don't do one-sided conversations

Old Man’s Beard a cyclist wobbles the length of it

sick train the night heron shifts silt for all of us

memory of starlight wink of a one-eyed dog as it sneezes

gliding four sulphur-crested cockatoos a green tinged sundown

black swan rising diving into cloudless sky

moviescreenflickerfullolifecanvasthin 

snowfall she takes her daffodils Underground

in-betweenness the grey heron seals the leaks of light

dustbunnies the coins of small change me

dragon tattoo my skinned fables of depression

the drum of the rain ghosting bare hands

leaves begin to fall this face too evolves from fish

the blue note I turn to wind-spun snow

irezumi the river coils into heron

intermittent rain I shed another crow

tearing up snow falls slowly a kind of blue


Published one-line haiku by various writers past and current:

a love letter to the butterfly gods with strategic misspellings
- Chris Gordon

rooks weaving darkness into the dusk
-- David Platt

waterbug running by the frogulp
-- Alan Pizzarelli

a stick goes over the falls at sunset
-- Cor van den Heuvel

Ah water-strider never to have left a track!
-- vincent tripi

between the piano’s phrases night wind
-- Fred Schofield

in the otherwise still twilight a clamor of robin wings
- Allan Burns

all these sounds not one of them a falling leaf
-- R.C. Matsuo-Allard

an owl hoots darkness down from the hollow oak
- Tombo (Lorraine Ellis Harr)

the blind child reading my poem with her fingertips
-- Elizabeth Searle Lamb

clay on the wheel I confess my faith
- Peggy Willis Lyles

deep inside the faded wood a scarlet maple
-- Nick Avis

pig and i spring rain
- Marlene Mountain
 
dusk      from rock to rock a waterthrush
- John Wills

pain fading the days back to wilderness
- Jim Kacian

white wind the eyes of the dead seal missing
- Carolyn Hall

the owl’s flight unheard stars appear
-- Peter Yovu

the blood rushing through my blowhole winter stars
- Scott Metz

mallards leaving in the water rippled sky
- Penny Harter

Spring thaw          wings beating inside my skull
- George Swede

night rain a calf stands tight by the bull
-- Pamela Brown

touching the ashes of my father
-- Bob Boldman

heading home I return the stone to the river
- Stuart Quine

 muzzle of the drinking cow glides across still water
- Janice M. Bostok

I breathe the wind breathes through the aspen
-- Martin Lucas

thrush song a few days before the thrush
- Marlene Mountain

swans      stir of his breath against my hair
- Alexis K. Rotella

lingering on this earth   dried onions
-- Ruby Spriggs

Before we knew its name the indigo bunting
–Peggy Willis Lyles


More rain the sisters slip into their mother tongue

–Scott Metz


shadows darkening three-sevenths of her face in sunlight

–Elizabeth Searle Lamb

mallards leaving in the water rippled sky

–Penny Harter



–Matsuo Allard (b. 1949):

through a column of factory steam the white gull

darkness across the river lights in a mill

higher this time the last salmon

alone at 3:00 a.m.—the door knob turning slowly

an icicle the moon drifting through it

passing clouds only a stand of aspens is in light

deep in my notebook a lily pad floats away


–Jeff Stillman:

cross-examination all morning a slanting rain

cold moon lover all business

wind’s second wind dead of winter

sweater mend unraveling . . . winter wears on

briefly the heron’s catch shaping its gullet

New Year’s morning the rent past due

hazy moon hung over the new year


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Sorry to hear your health has not been good, I know how that feels, in my own case.

warmest regards,

Alan


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Re: One line haiku
« Reply #20 on: January 24, 2016, 06:41:53 AM »
A longer piece about one line haiku will be appearing in a new anthology of haikai genres, and tanka.

Here's a glimpse, which has just my own work, but the longer piece will have one line haiku by known and very new but wonderful practitioners of the 'monoku':

all those red apples | travelling the monorail - haiku travelling in one line - one line haiku aka monostich aka monoku
http://area17.blogspot.co.uk/2015/12/all-those-red-apples-travelling.html


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Re: One line haiku
« Reply #21 on: April 16, 2016, 12:48:43 AM »
to me, the challenge to write a haiku in one line is to give the reader more freedom to discern phrases and fragments in it

the perfect combination of phrases and fragments would be a haiku, that can be arranged in a circle
i call it "ring haiku"

if the reader cannot discern different phrase-and-fragment combinations, the "oneliner is simply a three-line haiku rearranged in a line:

pink dawn airbrush tints bare twigs

(c) Maya


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Re: One line haiku
« Reply #22 on: April 16, 2016, 02:26:36 AM »
Glad to have found this thread.
Jan
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Re: One line haiku
« Reply #23 on: April 16, 2016, 03:41:02 AM »
Stephen Gill aka Tito, and a few other British Haiku Society members have created circular haiku, for example: https://hailhaiku.wordpress.com/tag/circular-poem/

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Re: One line haiku
« Reply #24 on: April 16, 2016, 05:52:46 AM »
Maya,  hi

can any one liner also be made into a three liner?  Does it work the other way round too?


Here is a one liner,  I have been reading for a few months now:



as an and you and you and you alone in the sea

                                                                  Dr. Richard Gilbert




If anyone comes, / Turn into frogs, / O cooling melons!

¬Issa

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Re: One line haiku
« Reply #25 on: April 16, 2016, 10:48:11 AM »
Hi, Anna,

Maya,  hi

can any one liner also be made into a three liner?  Does it work the other way round too?




                                                               

IMHO, if a oneliner can be divided into multiple phrase-and-fragment combinations (which i believe is a must), then rearranging it into 3 lines would spoil the effect.

If you can choose different words to start reading it, then it can be rearranged in a ring:

Maya Lyubenova, Plovdiv, Bulgaria

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Re: One line haiku
« Reply #26 on: October 08, 2016, 05:27:34 AM »
re one line haiku:

I have not been writing as many monostich haiku as usual, but here are a few:


juniper the tether end of larksong


Lake District, Cumbria, England, U.K. September 2015

Alan Summers
Publication Credit: Poetry & Place anthology issue 1
ed. Ashley Capes and Brooke (Close-Up Books, April 2016)
http://www.amazon.com/Poetry-Place-Anthology-Ashley-Capes/dp/0994528922



the mountain ash birdsong lichens

Lake District, Cumbria, England, U.K.

Alan Summers
Publication Credit: Blithe Spirit 26.1 (March 2016)
n.b. the latest Lake District haiku to appear in the next Blithe Spirit will be a three line one though. :)



colour book the cat becomes marmalade


Alan Summers
Publication Credit: Right Hand Pointing issue 95 (h a i k u edition, February 2016)
http://www.righthandpointing.net/#!95-alan-summers-ii/cj4i




moonlighting crows in other colors

Alan Summers
Publication Credit: Frogpond (39:1) Winter Issue 2016
Anthology Credit: 2016 HSA Member Anthology

n.b. fascinating comments by a student of mine too. They will find their way into my book. :-)



the rain in our fingers return journey

Alan Summers
Publication Credit: Blithe Spirit 26.2 (May 2016)



in God's pocket soldiers of the moon change


Alan Summers
Anthology Credit:
Heart Breaths: Book of Contemporary Haiku (Cyberwit March 5, 2016)
ed. Jean LeBlanc
http://www.amazon.com/Heart-Breaths-Book-Contemporary-Haiku/dp/9385945033/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1459424848&sr=8-1&keywords=Heart+Breaths+haiku



not yet light the wall and its black cat


Alan Summers
Publication Credit:
brass bell: a haiku journal: April issue: one-line haiku
http://brassbellhaiku.blogspot.co.uk/2016/04/april-issue-one-line-haiku.html

n.b.
I am sorely tempted to revise this as walls and cats, often black ones, feel synonymous with each other during morning or evening dusk:

e.g.

not yet light the wall its black cat





sun off stubble a train in its landscape


Alan Summers
Publication Credit:
otata 4 (April, 2016) An e-zine of haiku and short poems, Otata ed. John Martone
https://otatablog.wordpress.com/2016/04/29/april-2016/



call of geese the heart I eat inside


Alan Summers
Publication Credit:
otata 4 (April, 2016) An e-zine of haiku and short poems, Otata ed. John Martone
https://otatablog.wordpress.com/2016/04/29/april-2016/



cusp month the housemartins field a meadow

Alan Summers
Publication Credit: Blithe Spirit 26.3 (2016)
From the haibun: Growing Pains Of The Fairy Tale Train
cusp month re May into June 2016




meadow borders the river clouds

Alan Summers
Presence #56 (October 2016 issn 1366-5367)



Please do post more one line haiku here. :)

warm regards,

Alan

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Re: One line haiku
« Reply #27 on: October 08, 2016, 01:51:02 PM »
Alan:
Really appreciate the update on activity regarding monoku.

The single line KU have been on my mind lately, and I'm realizing the few I have published are really too long, as haiku seem to be going towards 10 syllables.

I'll join in though.
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cold water on an african violet ghosts bloom

Brass Bell, May 1/ 2016
http://brassbellhaiku.blogspot.com/2016_05_01_archive.html
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gypsy moon slip knot lens

Failed Haiku, May 1, 2016, page 57
http://www.haikuhut.com/FailedHaikuIssue5.pdf
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crescent moon and her silk blouse a zephyr swells

Frogpond 38:2, page 46


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Re: One line haiku
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Re: One line haiku
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